i’m about halfway through reading and critiquing derek’s story, and thought i’d post an update since it’s been a little while.
i like it.
that is all.
the thing i find amusing about this version of our project is that we decided to not use the same topics, but we still ended up writing something similarly based. the stories are pretty much total opposites in content, but there’s one idea that sort of hinges them together.
based on derek’s post just before, i think i already know what some of his ideas for my story will be. when i sent him my first draft, i already had about seven or eight things i wanted to change, but i got delayed in finishing it up, so i didn’t want to wait any longer. conceptually i really like my story, but i’m not sure it worked as well as i wanted it to in this form.
i wrote what basically amounts to a comic book super hero origin story. which i think worked at times, and others it was a bit difficult to translate into a short story. if i was working with an artist and actually doing a comic book, it would improve tenfold. a lot of what i was trying to get across would have been so much easier with narration text and images, instead of what i felt was someone telling you every little detail of the past year of their life condensed into 3500 or so words.
i’m awaiting what he has to say about it, because i think we may be on the same page with a lot of things. but then again, this is derek we’re talking about, so i’m sure he’ll surprise me and come at it from an entirely different angle than i’m expecting.